Business Improvement Proposal, Assignment & Rubric
Business Improvement Proposal, Assignment & Rubric
SCMA 325 Organizational Communication, Fall 2016
Instructor:______
[20% of Grade]
Description: For this assignment you will write a 3-5 page single-spaced professionally-written
proposal to a former boss with a plan to address a business-related problem. Proposals take many
forms, but generally they describe a problem/identify a need/opportunity; recommend a solution/
response; and provide a plan for implementation. (Some suggest several potential solutions/
responses and recommend one over the others.)
While many proposals are formal documents authored by consulting companies and used to
persuade other organizations to retain their services, less formal proposals, particularly those
made by one employee to another inside an organization, abound daily. There are many activities
that we may propose others in our organization do in response to a perceived need or problem.
For example:
• You could propose your company adopt new technology or conduct research on the
customer base.
• Perhaps you believe they should explore the capacity for growth in a certain market
sector.
• Perhaps you would like to propose they develop a new product.
• You could propose an employee policy regarding absences/leave or suggest alternatives to
scheduling, hiring or training.
• You might have suggestions to curb theft.
• You may have ideas on how to make a process more effective or efficient.
There are limitless problems you may encounter. But there are some very specific and important
approaches to formulating your proposal so that it is persuasive and taken seriously by decisionmakers.
Toward that end, include the following in your proposal.
Make Sure Your Proposal Contains the following:
A. Current Situation. Introduce the problem to your boss(es). Explain/describe what motivated
you to consider the phenomena to be problematic. Provide enough background information to
enable a reader who is unfamiliar with the situation to understand the issue, including the
negative consequences that this problem incurs. Consider who, what, where, and when to
determine if you have provided adequate description of the problem.
B. Goals. Clearly explain the goals of your proposal. This will entail describing the positive
consequences from addressing the situation. Frame them in terms of your audience’s goals, not
your own. (E.g. If your boss doesn’t care about making computer repair service calls shorter but
wants to reduce call-backs from 15% to 3%, then frame the recommendations mainly in these
terms, even if your recommendations will improve both time-to-repair and reduce call-backs.)
C. Proposed Methodology (“Implementation Plan”; “Schedule of Events”). Describe how
you would improve the problem through a set of recommended steps to lead the organization to
meeting their goals. (Remember to frame the recommendations in terms of your audience’s (i.e.
bosses’) goals, not yours. See above.) Consider who, what, when, and where for these
recommended steps and describe why these changes should be made. Account for Equipment,
Facilities, Financial and Other Costs (e.g. disruptions in service during renovation), and
Personnel.
• Note: Avoid telling your boss what to do. Use words like could or might, not would or
will. E.g. “You will offer 3 training sessions to help employees learn to use the new
software” versus “you could offer 3 training sessions to help employees learn to use the
new software.” Use “modal verbs” such as can, could, may, might, shall, should, will and
would. (See more at: https://learnenglish.britishcouncil.org/en/english-grammar/verbs/
modal-verbs/certain-probable-or-possible#sthash.QncqYqzE.dpuf)
D. Time and cost. Thoroughly explain the time and cost requirements for each step in the
methodology, based on your calculations. (In consultants’ business proposals, this section would
also specify how you would be billing the client, and when payment would be expected.)
E. Your Background/Qualifications. In a consultant’s business proposal, this would be included
in a separate section fully describing why you and your company are best for this job; it would
include information based on your competitive strengths and on the proposal's evaluation
criteria. However, for this assignment you are an internal employee, and you will want to
remind your boss about your length of employment and your accomplishments while you
have been there. Just as you did for cover letters and resumes, you can describe your aptitudes
and experiences (e.g. formal coursework in business or customer service experience) then
provide supporting evidence for how this makes you qualified to evaluate the situation and
recommend solutions. For instance, you might say that in your formal coursework at VCU, you
learned how to evaluate social marketing campaigns and this enables you to see untapped
opportunities in your present organization. As with cover letters, qualifications might include
factors such as passion for improving the situation, willingness to commit extra effort to solving
the problem, or ability to motivate others to assist with making changes to address the problem.
F. Benefits. Discuss the benefits the organization will receive by implementing your
recommendations. Be sure to TRANSLATE “consequences” into “benefits.” In other words,
“connect the dots” here; don’t presume these links are obvious in a reader’s mind! Be sure you
also connect the dots between the goal your proposed improvement will fulfill and the overall
goals of the company (e.g. if you propose to reduce meal prep time in the restaurant’s kitchen,
describe how this would enable wait staff to give customers hotter, fresher meals and quicker
service, AND that this in turn would increase customer satisfaction).
E. Brief Conclusion. Recap the problem and your recommendations. As with a cover letter, end
with a “call to action”: tell your boss you would like to set up a meeting and discuss your ideas.
You can organization these elements the way that best serves the problem and your
audience. For example, you might choose to add subheadings as you see fit. However, make
sure the organization functions to impart information and persuade your unique audience.
Rubric, Business
Improvement
Proposal
Traits Strong Okay Weak
Function
(e.g. uses formal
business discourse
related to the
industry in which the
business operates;
demonstrates focus
of purpose in
evaluating problem
and providing
detailed
recommendations to
improve/address it;
frames problem and
benefits of
addressing it in terms
that appeal to the
audience (i.e. what
your boss values, not
you); depicts
personal engagement
with and
commitment to
solving the problem
(“pathos”))
Clear sense of
audience and
purpose.
Audience and
purpose are present
but could be stronger
Audience and purpose
are less clear, and
weak parts remain
Form
& content
(e.g. paper includes
sections that are
identified and used
to serve a specific
informational
purpose; arguments
are not lists of
reasons but a
cohesive discussion;
employs an
introduction with a
thesis and forecast of
the problem,
solution, and
benefits; uses
transitions from one
section to another;
proposal builds an
argument as the
paper progresses;
includes a conclusion
that restates the
main points
Organization of paper
is clear. Each major
section contributes to
the overarching
argument; the author
has made this clear by
tying
recommendations and
assertions back to the
main argument
(thesis) during the
course of the paper
(i.e. this is a problem
and it can be
addressed).
Organization is mostly
clear. Most major
sections contribute to
the overall argument,
but author is less
consistent at
connecting assertions
to the overarching
argument.
Organization is
confusing. Major
sections are missing or
are not tied back to
the overarching
argument.
Description and
detail seem
present but do
not support a
coherent point.
Effectiveness
(e.g. Provides wellarticulated,
detailed
recommendations to
improve business;
accounts for
limitations &
constraints
realistically; retains
tone of authority and
objectivity)
Paper is richly
detailed and
culminates in a
convincing argument.
Paper culminates in an
argument but is less
convincing than it
could be. Some
inconsistencies in
sections remain.
Paper does not
culminate in a
convincing argument.
Lacks detail and
coherence. Several
weaknesses need
attention or revision
Grammar &
mechanics
(e.g. 12 point font, 3
pages (5 for Honors),
standard memo
format,
grammatically
correct and free of
typos, subheadings
used consistently,
etc.)
Writer follows all
guidelines for
spelling, grammar,
usage, mechanics,
etc. Wording is strong
and sentences have
a varied structure/
syntax employing a
formal tone; meets
basic formatting
requirements for
intra-organizational
memos
Writer follows most
guidelines, but
wording in some
sections is unclear,
uneven, informal in
tone, or contains
errors, leaving some
passages difficult to
understand. Some
basic formatting
requirements are not
met.
Writer follows some
guidelines, but
wording in many
sections is unclear,
uneven, informal in
tone, or contains
errors, leaving the
paper generally
difficult to
understand. Basic
formatting
requirements are not
met.
Checklist for BIP:
Dr. Laural Adams
(Yellow highlight: critical for a well-organized proposal; Red text: a
common oversight on this type of assignment)
Introduction:
• ___Include formal memo components (See page 330 figure 3 Proposal in Memo
Format). Single spaced.
• ___Establish/maintain rapport with recipient through a “buffer.” (See page
255 figure 4 on Buffer Types: agreement; appreciation; compliment; facts;
general principle; good news; understanding).
• ___Segue to the problem (often with a rhetorical signal to switch the
conversational direction, such as “However, ….”.)
• ___Describe the problem with enough background, given your boss’
background knowledge. (Since I don’t know what your boss knows, you will
need to be able to explain to me your rational for this choice).
• ___Describe the problem with clarity (complex problems are “unpacked” so
that dynamics between certain phenomena are easy to follow).
• ___Describe the problem without blaming anyone with a tone of hostility or
finger-pointing. In contrast, use passive construction (“mistakes were made”)
or frame problems in terms of the limitations/constraints the actors faced (in
other words, their responsibility is mitigated or lessened because they lacked
something, perhaps time, training, supervision, etc., so that it reads that there
were other factors to blame).
• ___End with a thesis (there is/are solution(s) to the problem) and forecast
(preview of the order/organization in which you will be discussing the
solution(s) & steps for implementation).
• ___Be sure the forecast reflects the organization of your proposal (in other
words, your preview of the discussion matches your actual discussion):
o E.g. I suggest we address this problem by _____, and below I outline five
steps for doing so.
o E.g. I believe there are 3 potential solutions to this problem. In the
remainder of this memo, I assess the costs and benefits of each, and
recommend the most feasible one. I then provide a brief overview of a
plan for implementing the solution.
• ___Establish your credibility (early credibility may be established with a tone
of expertise, confidence and respect for some boss’; for others, it may be
necessary to more formally present qualifications that enable you to
understand the problem and recommend solutions).
• ___Assert the significance of the problem to the organization/boss.
• ___Assert the benefits of addressing the problem for the organization/boss
(this does NOT have to be a bulleted list!).
Body:
• ___Where relevant, provide more depth to the problem, organizing
information logically and coherently. Ask yourself: who, what, when where, and
why to evaluate whether you have described the problem fully for your
audience.
• ___Where appropriate, use research to back up your assertions by quoting or
paraphrasing (See page 330 figure 3 for using footnotes to cite sources).
• ___Include others’ opinions and experiences (testimonials) to help support
your assertions where appropriate (e.g. the night crew has confirmed the
reports that ….).
• ___Provide quantitative estimates of the benefits of addressing the problem
where feasible (e.g. cost savings, increased sales, etc.). Make reasonably
informed estimates of these benefits. (For benefits that do not lend themselves
to quantitative measures, link the benefits to the overall well-being of the
company.)
• ___Provide quantitative estimates of costs of the problem or solution where
feasible (make sure you do your research! Important: look up costs of services
and products you recommend on the internet! If you don’t have information on
hand that you need in order to calculate for resources, come up with
reasonable estimates e.g. 2 additional employees at $10.00/hour for 10
additional shifts means the increased wages for these employees will amount
to ___).
• ___Anticipate and calculate for hidden factors! (Who will hire these
individuals, how much time will it take, and how much does this person make
per hour? Who will train these new hires? How much time will it take and how
much do they make per hour?)
• ___When necessary, present quantitative information in easy-to-read ways
(tables, lists, graphs, etc.).
• Uses headings and bullets that add to the discussion and reflect the forecast
(preview).
• ___Recognize the limitations of your solution (or constraints, characteristics
of the situation that can’t be changed).
• ___Anticipate resistance (objections) to your proposal and present
counterarguments (argue that the benefits of your solution outweigh costs).
• ___Account for resources, such as facilities, time, or expertise required.
• ___Argue that the benefits of your solution outweigh costs) Anticipate and
calculate for hidden resource requirements!
• ___Include realistic steps for implementation, answering who, what, when,
and where for each task, and also providing a time-table when possible.
Conclusion:
• ___Restate (but don’t repeat!) the thesis and the solution.
• ___Mention the most salient points again (the significance of the problem?
Certain urgent details related to the implementation plan? This will be context
specific).
• ___Remind your boss that the benefits outweigh the costs.
• ___Remind your boss what the organization/boss stands to gain.
• ___End with a “call to action”— e.g. ask for a meeting to discuss the ideas.
• ___Include an appropriate closing salutation (not “Best”, as your audience for
a grade (i.e. this teacher) dislikes it!).
Make sure you have also included:
• ___The experiences and education that make you qualified to pass judgment
on the problem and recommend a solution. (This is NOT a separate section! Put
it where it makes sense to you.)
• ___Evidence that you are committed to helping with the solution.
• ___A tone of objectivity and rationality, in contrast to hostility or blame.
• ___A formal tone in contrast to an informal conversational tone.
• ___Transitions between sections to signal a change in discussion, even when
they are separated by headings or subheadings.
• ___Topic sentences at the start of new sections to signal changes in discussion
(to tell the reader whatto discuss