urban parks with picturesque designs

this essay include a comparison between naturally and artificially formed urban parks and analyze which characteristics make them "picturesque". What components and which methods will create a decent picturesque landscape.. the uploaded file includes my first attempt (in black) and professor's comments (in red) Ece Murtezaoglu Thesis Statement Draft (150-200 words) 10.20.15  There are naturally formed seams around us - abstract lines- coded and already presenting sites, or specific objects. The line where rainforest ecosystem leaves its place to terrestrial land is distinct, a bird’s nest is bounded by a line of its trace and the tree it resides in, and any artificial intervention is bound to affect and be affected by these existing seams. Parks have materials open to such adjustments and modifications. The trees are suitable for lightening to strike which renders the tree picturesque, or the soft land below our feet are usually open moldable by our occupancy. Urban parks are usually a solution to something; smell stress view. So they are mediating the artificially formed problems by using naturally found objects, specific to their sites. Creativity is an ongoing process of continual change and reaction. Form is vulnerable to becoming a convention. Mediating/ fragmented/picturesque objects are relieving the possibility of becoming a convention because of their very nature to transmit, coalesce and reflect place and time. Ece this is not yet a thesis statement. In order for me to respond, please revisit this after reading the email that I sent regarding the formulation of thesis statements. The above reads as a description rather than a statement that you will be arguing for. In general, in ecology, the “line” between one biotope and another is describable but not distinct though it is a mappable area called an ecotone. The idea of borders is a very interesting one, so I suggest that you really plumb that idea, but also you need to tie this to the organizing idea of the picturesque. Also you can revisit the Stan Allen Campo marzio piece because he deals very explicity with borders (and frames) in that piece of writing. I’m not sure if this is specifically what you’re interested in as the idea needs more clarification…..for example what is a “small stress view”? Once you have a sense of what you really care about in the statements above, it will be easier for you to focus the statement and argument. What is really at stake? Redraft as soon as you can, but not before you have consulted a variety of primary texts (ie., not internet) relating to the subject of your inquiry. Please include that bibliography with your statement.